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Old 05-26-2007, 12:46 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Should I submit this poem to my school's lit mag?

I already posted this poem, but I forgot to ask about submitting it. I really don't know good poetry from bad, so...

To Pretty Smelling Flowers - (Free Verse? Pt. 1)
I binge on you, flower; yet I cannot purge you out
You remain persistent, like a virus you spread,
An ill infection, yet your cure I dread.
For to you, I am attached, there is no doubt.

Why this obsession can I not best?
What makes you unlike all the rest,
On whom I have lingered and turned away?
Whose eyes have lit a match of desire
But never ignited that glowing pyre?
Why have you chosen to stay?
I hold you, emptily, in my heart,
Which you have not held from the start.
But I have left you into this garden to germinate.
This love I have let mature and grow,
On what grounds I perhaps shall never know
But on you, my infatuation, if nothing else, grows great.
However, clearly unreciprocated is what I see
For I understand that it should never be
Now that your hand is rooted firmly to another.
Was it all along my own delusion?
Or did you intend me perceive the illusion,
By which me your untamed growth could smother?
I now attempt whatever I must,
To avoid you, my ravenous lust
Yet nothing I do will frighten you off
Steadily, to me you return
And so, incessantly, for you I yearn
My evasion but a minor cough

I binge on you, flower; yet I cannot purge you out
You remain persistent, like a virus you spread,
An ill infection, yet your cure I dread.
For to you, I am attached, there is no doubt.

-so that's it then
oh and I'll probably change "virus" to weeds or something to that effect.
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Old 05-27-2007, 11:28 AM   #2 (permalink)
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Old 05-28-2007, 10:09 AM   #3 (permalink)
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Should I submit this poem to my school's lit mag?

OMG THAT IS SO BEAUTIFUL!!!!!!!!!!! yes submit it!!!!!




btw u are an awesome writer :-)
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Old 05-29-2007, 08:51 AM   #4 (permalink)
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Should I submit this poem to my school's lit mag?

of course! you should enter anything you have written into your schools literary magazine. thats what its for, to share your poems! since you are sharing it with complete strangers on the internet who enjoy it, i'm sure your peers will enjoy it too.
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Old 05-30-2007, 07:33 AM   #5 (permalink)
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There is no such thing as good or bad poetry... that is decided by the people who read it!!! The main thing is, if you like it, and you enjoy writing it, then it doesn't matter what anyone else thinks.... go for it bud!!!
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Old 05-31-2007, 06:15 AM   #6 (permalink)
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Should I submit this poem to my school's lit mag?

i did published mine in school as anonymous but my closed knows its mine after it was published. Later they all want to hang around and ask my opinions?

yours are extreme and in my opinion you should do what you think as of this moment for Time waits for no one.

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Old 06-01-2007, 04:57 AM   #7 (permalink)
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Amazing!
You should def submit that!!!!! I love your writing and hope I can write like that one day!
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Old 06-02-2007, 03:39 AM   #8 (permalink)
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This is good (I don't say that often--check around).

You need to start somewhere, I would think this would be a shoe-in for your school's literary mag.
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